Twilightkit

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They call me Dayna' and I've hunted through Thirteen green-leafs. They say that I'm Daring, Sly,Smart and I'm not planning on changing anytime soon. I have read closely and I have found that the magic words are **admin edit. Many warriors live within my clan boundaries but I fight within Twilightkit, and I've been fighting along this path for 2 Yearsand people say I'm damn good at it.

``Image all the people, sharing for the world[/color][/font][/b]

nicknames: Twilight>> ...
age: 2 Moons>>...
gender: She Cat>>...
alliance: Bloodclan>> ...
status: single>>...
rank: Kit>> ...
race: Cat>>...

``Imagine there's no Heaven, it's easy if you try [/b][/size][/color]

FAMILY: Twilightkit was found in the nursery one day, with the bloodclan scent and blood. Her real mother and father are unknown to her and others. Siblings as well. She spends her days alone, around camp or in the forest area near camp.>> ...
mother: Unknown>>...
father: Unknown>> ...
siblings: Unknown>>...
extended family: Unknown>> ...

``You may say that I'm a dreamer but I'm not the only one[/b][/size][/color]

KindSilentThinkerIntelligentSly

FULL PERSONALITY: Twilightkit is quiet and silent. She is kind in ways unheard of. She normally hides instead of speaking. Because she has the sense that everyone hates her.She spends most of her days outside of camp, in the shadows, near the swamps or meadows at late evenings or at night. During the day she sleeps off the time she spent awake, or hides in the shade where its nice and cool. She is the silent type. But will speak to those, who talk to her. But can be very good at strategies in war combat, and medical assistance. All though a kit, when apprenticed she will find out her path that she chooses to help and ratin under. And do anything, to help those of her clan in need. Even sacrifice her own life. >>...


strengths:.>>[li]
[/li][li] Shes smart and kind
[/li][li] Can assist in medicines
[/li][li] Can also rip your head when angry
[/li][li] Strategist.
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flaws: >>[/li][li]
[/li][li] Can be cold hearted
[/li][li] Silent
[/li][li] Will go on days without rest.
[/li][li] Not highly skilled in warrior skills.
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likes :.>>[/li][li]
[/li][li] The Moon and stars
[/li][li] Night air
[/li][li] Night Hours
[/li][li] Winter
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dislikes : The Sun, Summer time,Day time.>>[/li][li]
[/li][li] The Sun
[/li][li] Summer Heat
[/li][li] Day Time
[/li][li] Summer
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``No hell below us, above it's only sky[/b][/size][/color]

APPEARANCE : Young Black she cat kit, with blue eyes, and slender body shape. She is all though quiet, she plans out things carefully and tends to do things herself, for the idea to succeed. She also would ask others to assist, if needed. But she is only a kit right now, so she would do things herself, give suggestions or stay out of trouble.Unless if needed things were chaotic she would step up to help the issue. Her pelt being black, she camouflage, and hunt easily. Body being small, she makes little sound when moving gracefully along the grace ready to hunt, or attack with great amounts of strength. >> ...
Black>>...
Blue>> ...
(( Canadian here, so it maybe confusing if u don't know LBS)) Shes 15 lbs.>>...
[bSmall and Slender[/b][/color]>> ...
distinguishing marks: (( dont know what to put, but will estimate is this could be correct.)) She has birth marks on her hind paws. A Star and a Crescent Moon.>>...

``No need for greed or hunger, a brotherhood of man[/b][/size][/color]

FULL HISTORY: not Alot, shes only a kit. She was found in the nursery, but thick scent of Bloodclan descents, allowing her to remain in the clan. She spends her time alone. Being considered half outsider, half clan mate. Or so she thinks. She was found in the nursery mid winter, where everything was crisp and cold. Which the scenario made no sense at all to any cat. who speculated. She is naturally silent and will speak up if need be. She knows to stalk her own prey and sneak around with ease. She cant battle well at all. She has alot to learn. but she knows how to treat her own cuts and bruises with the things around her. She also devises plans for getting around, makes routes,a dn has a good memory to store evidential and needed information.>> ...
other : none.......................>>...

``I hope someday you'll join us, and the world will live as one[/b][/size][/color]
role playing sample>>

copy and paste sample here : Haven't posted yet, but create an example. :

Twilightkit sneaked out of the nursery,her blue eyes cascading over the surroundings of the night. The Stars were shining bright, and she stalked around the area. The Night air filling her small lungs. She prodded around until around dawn, and continued for several hours that cats were waking up at. Still not tired she went back into the nursery with prey from the fresh kill pile for the queens and attempted to sleep. So not long after noisy kits bounded into the nursery disrupting her half sleeping state. She got up silently and left the nursery. It was near sunhgihg and she was dreading each moment as she walked across the rough dry ground beneath her. He paws padded across the ground until reaching soft grass outside the clan entrance. She then went to her favorite shady spot, and settled back down again, for the settle nap she was planning to take before.

``CREDITS

This application was created by ``Breezy of Warriors: Cats of All Clans, and the idea for this application came from The Infamous Peregrine of Sine Qua Non. The lyrics for this application were taken from John Lennon's Imagine.
Do not steal.

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If you don't receive a private message with further details within the next three hours, feel free to hit me over the head with a spoon.

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I edited.... U may read over some of the parts that were missing. I just added more detail looked for errors and used spell check two times.

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kindly go and look at the WHAT WE"RE LOOKING FOR thread again (the Bio Format thread, first post);;
please pay attention to the LAYOUT ^^

- - > LINKAGE*

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Twi. I think it would eb ebst if you copied the Layout again and re-did it. You have to fill in every section (no deleting parts) with suffieient detail before we can approve it.

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Ok, My computer is having issues, getting that code to work right, also it loads very slowly making the comp freeze.. so that makes me worried if Im ever gonna get this done..

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maybe you could paste this on to a word document, and work on it there?

Also, when you type in your information, please don't have the information be bold and red; it's supposed to go after the three blue/beige dots;; example below;

FULL HISTORY:>>...Whatever information you need to put after this section to get it okayed by an admin;;

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`Twilightkit





They call me Dayna' and I've hunted through Thirteen green-leafs. They say that I'm Daring, Sly,Smart and I'm not planning on changing anytime soon. I have read closely and I have found that the magic words are **admin edit. Many warriors live within my clan boundaries but I fight within Twilightkit, and I've been fighting along this path for 2 Yearsand people say I'm damn good at it.

``Image all the people, sharing for the world


nicknames:>> ... Twilight
age: >>... 2 moons
gender:>>... She Cat
alliance: >> ... Bloodclan
status:>>...single
rank:>> ... Kit
race:>>... Cats


``Imagine there's no Heaven, it's easy if you try


FAMILY: Twilightkit was found in the nursery one day, with the bloodclan scent and blood. Her real mother and father are unknown to her and others. Siblings as well. She spends her days alone, around camp or in the forest area near camp.>> ...
mother: Unknown>>...
father: Unknown>> ...
siblings: Unknown>>...
extended family: Unknown>> ...


``You may say that I'm a dreamer but I'm not the only one


KindSilentThinkerIntelligentSly


FULL PERSONALITY: Twilightkit is quiet and silent. She is kind in ways unheard of. She normally hides instead of speaking. Because she has the sense that everyone hates her.She spends most of her days outside of camp, in the shadows, near the swamps or meadows at late evenings or at night. During the day she sleeps off the time she spent awake, or hides in the shade where its nice and cool. She is the silent type. But will speak to those, who talk to her. But can be very good at strategies in war combat, and medical assistance. All though a kit, when apprenticed she will find out her path that she chooses to help and ratin under. And do anything, to help those of her clan in need. Even sacrifice her own life. >>...


# strengths:.>>

# Shes smart and kind
# Can assist in medicines
# Can also rip your head when angry
# Strategist.

# flaws: >>
# Can be cold hearted
# Silent
# Will go on days without rest.
# Not highly skilled in warrior skills.


# likes :.>>
# The Moon and stars
# Night air
# Night Hours
# Winter


# dislikes : The Sun, Summer time,Day time.>>
# The Sun
# Summer Heat
# Day Time
# Summer


``No hell below us, above it's only sky


APPEARANCE : Young Black she cat kit, with blue eyes, and slender body shape. She is all though quiet, she plans out things carefully and tends to do things herself, for the idea to succeed. She also would ask others to assist, if needed. But she is only a kit right now, so she would do things herself, give suggestions or stay out of trouble.Unless if needed things were chaotic she would step up to help the issue. Her pelt being black, she camouflage, and hunt easily. Body being small, she makes little sound when moving gracefully along the grace ready to hunt, or attack with great amounts of strength. >> ...
Black>>...
Blue>> ...
(( Canadian here, so it maybe confusing if u don't know LBS)) Shes 15 lbs.>>...
[bSmall and Slender[/b]>> ...
distinguishing marks: (( dont know what to put, but will estimate is this could be correct.)) She has birth marks on her hind paws. A Star and a Crescent Moon.>>...


``No need for greed or hunger, a brotherhood of man


FULL HISTORY: .>> ... Twilightkit is a silent individual, shes also cold and a quick thinker. She remains calm at most situations, but can be easy to anger. Her past history consisted of her being found in the clan's nursery in the middle of the night. Near twilight hour. Giving the name she has now. But also it was written on the floor from twigs beside her. She had the scent of Bloodclan. So thats how she was accepted. Other clan members were hostile or were too nice. Twilightkit despised it. She rather be treated normal that some weirdo. Shes commonly ignored, making it easy for her to sneak out at camp and she sits outside camp, waiting for her parents or siblings to show. By dawn break she heads into the nursery for brief sleep and awaits everyday near the enterance at the hour when she was dropped to this place. Its been 2 moons since the occurance. And she may wait longer or not so long now. She silently awaits her parents and apprenticeship, and what life holds for her.
other : .......................>>... None


``I hope someday you'll join us, and the world will live as one
role playing sample>>
Quote:
copy and paste sample here : Haven't posted yet, but create an example. :

Twilightkit sneaked out of the nursery,her blue eyes cascading over the surroundings of the night. The Stars were shining bright, and she stalked around the area. The Night air filling her small lungs. She prodded around until around dawn, and continued for several hours that cats were waking up at. Still not tired she went back into the nursery with prey from the fresh kill pile for the queens and attempted to sleep. So not long after noisy kits bounded into the nursery disrupting her half sleeping state. She got up silently and left the nursery. It was near sunhgihg and she was dreading each moment as she walked across the rough dry ground beneath her. He paws padded across the ground until reaching soft grass outside the clan entrance. She then went to her favorite shady spot, and settled back down again, for the settle nap she was planning to take before.


``CREDITS

This application was created by ``Breezy of Warriors: Cats of All Clans, and the idea for this application came from The Infamous Peregrine of Sine Qua Non. The lyrics for this application were taken from John Lennon's Imagine.
Do not steal.

(( reposted.. and I hope this will work,__

[Breezers]

(this is Breezy, but I'm too lazy at the moment to log in...)

and I hope you won't take this the wrong way, but WHAT DID YOU DO TO IT? *end high-pitched shriek of dismay* my codes! My cooooooodessss! WHYYYYYYYY???


*glares at Twilightkit with Gaara-like eyes whilst she await an answer*

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whoa. I did nothings. I dunno why it turned into that! * hides far far away*

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Breezy, quit it. She's done the bio without the coding because it gave her trouble. Just read over it already. The coding has nothing to do with the bio other than look pretty.

If it irrtates you so greatly, edit the info into the first bio posted. I hardly see the point in dragging this out any longer seeing as Twi has indeed filled out the necessary headings.

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*pouts* fine *stretches and prepares to examine*

Her FAMILY section is very very unrealistic, even in the warrior world; you need to either change it to something else or alter it to make it more believable.

as for the family members, I believe that I stated in the biography help threads that when doing family, it is not permissable to simply enter "unknown". There must be a name, and if you wish for the family members to not be known to the character, you must indicate so with an "unknown" (there MUST be a name, though);

the likes/dislikes/weaknesses/strentghs sections need AT LEAST FIVE;;

STRENGTHS
# She's smart and kind -how is this a strenth?
# Can assist in medicines -read above stated question
# Can also rip your head when angry -this is not a strength, this is something that she can do; explain or alter to fit this section;
# Strategist. -she's a kit; this is very unlikely

FLAWS
# Silent -how is being silent a flaw?
# Will go on days without rest. -isn't that a goood thing? Being able to go for days without rest? Please clarify;
# Not highly skilled in warrior skills. -I should think not - she's two moons (months) old!
your character needs to have at least five SIGNIFICANT FLAWS;


LIKES
# The Moon and stars
# Night air
# Night Hours
# Winter
none of these tell us anything about your character;;


DISLIKES
The Sun, Summer time,Day time.
# The Sun
# Summer Heat
# Day Time
# Summer
none of these tell us anything about your character;; furthermore, most of them are variating repititions of each other;


Twilightkit is a silent individual, shes also cold and a quick thinker. She remains calm at most situations, but can be easy to anger. Her past history consisted of her being found in the clan's nursery in the middle of the night. Near twilight hour. Giving the name she has now. But also it was written on the floor from twigs beside her. She had the scent of Bloodclan. So thats how she was accepted. Other clan members were hostile or were too nice. Twilightkit despised it. She rather be treated normal that some weirdo. Shes commonly ignored, making it easy for her to sneak out at camp and she sits outside camp, waiting for her parents or siblings to show. By dawn break she heads into the nursery for brief sleep and awaits everyday near the enterance at the hour when she was dropped to this place. Its been 2 moons since the occurance. And she may wait longer or not so long now. She silently awaits her parents and apprenticeship, and what life holds for her. -This history is what we like to refer as a melodramatic attempt to make your character interesting. Which means that you make odd coincidences for the character's birth/finding/etc., and you try and have them be incredibly intellegent or impressive even when there's no way that they could possibly have had that happen (say, for instance, being of the stragetical mind, at two moons of age, when you're not even old enough to leave the nursery;;
furthermore, there are far too many ellipses here, and I get a very strong impression of not getting everything, which destroys the purpose of the biography. We want this to know as much as we possibly can about the character you are bringing to our world, and that means we want to know everything. We don't want "mysterious pasts that cannot be disclosed right now" or anything like that. Because, the fact in the matter is, not every single character in thw whole wide world needs to have a tragic or mysterioys past, and they don't need to hate the world or be super shy just to be interesting. Perfectly normal characters are works of art, and we love those! If there's ever a need for a character with "issues", members can discuss this and create a plot to make sure the charcter actually has a reason for what happened, and what will happen, and that they'll have opportunities to be role played.
Maybe I'm a little too passionate about this, but I really hate seeing so many characters created like this simply because they wish for their character to "stand out"; the fact in the matter is, they don't stand out anymore, because there's so many of them. The normals are much more special, now.

Haven't posted yet, but create an example -again, as can be found in the biography help threads, your sample must be a recycled one -- one that has been previously used for an actual role play, for a character played by you;



Wow, that was long.....*wanders off to watch Shippuden*

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*smashes head against desk* Im starting to hate this. LOL , alright, for the Family. I dont know who is my family yet, So I would have to either re update it or fake some random names there.

Silent is a flaw, because then i dont communicate, then I cant argue or express my opinion.
Intelligence and Kindness can make me a better kitty. Intelligence, means i have brain to get through situations and Kindness to pursuade.

Now if you will excuse me.. I need to go check my stomach's pH levels again.

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For the family, I think the idea is you know who they are but the character itself doesn't. I think Bree's looking for some BG on that.

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that's exactly what I'm looking for; WE, the REAL people, need to know about it; the character can go off and play in ignorent bliss;


continue on

*goes off to watch some more Shippuden*

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What..?? (( did u just accept the bio or did u tell me to do some more updates? XD Me very frozen Kitty cause Canada decided to have winter.. AGAIN! its minus 30.. Lovely isnt it?!? * freezes like popsicle * ))

* Goes to bed cuz its 11 : 20 PM on a tuesday and feels tired all though sick. *

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More updates. This still hasn't been approved.

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((that seriously sucks))

and yes, I meant updates; you'll know when the profile's been accepted, because it will be very obvious....(look back to my first reply)

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*smashes head again. * To be honest, this is most strict site I have EVER been on, for Biographies! HONESTLY, dont take that as a bad thing. I just dont think people need to continuously type a large form for 1 character....... * thus stating my opinion* Like, its cool and all, But this is becoming more like SCHOOL ESSAYS, then a play to role play and have fun with fellow clan members... Like, being in Junior High School, I havae homework, a life, projects and a job. Not like I can do this like every second day, to find out , OMG, still not perfect.

So I am personally annoyed at this point. Im sorry.
Like for normal bios would be like this :

Name:
Clan:
Appearance:
History:

Etc..

I have probably spent more time on this, than homework! I SWEAR TO GOD.

(( this isnt meant of any offense what so ever. Im stating my opinion, and warning to you all after you read this : Im a very cranky child today, and other days. Im not having alot of fun with something right now. Its not your business in that matter. But its not like I got all darn week/days/months for this stupid bio. If its important to you, great. But it isnt to me. Dont take this the wrong way. If you do, you should maybe stand in my shoes for a while and see. Then you might understand. If you dont, just pm me, and I can put it for simplier format. ))

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Hooookay. First off, relax. Secondly, I'm kind of getting annoyed by this situation.

Breezy is the one who approves this Bio Form because she created it. But if it's going to cause this much trouble to get one bio approved, then the board will never be able to expand.

I think the Bio needs to be taken to the staff board and the headins given a thorough looking through by all of the admins. There are probably things that could be taken out and other things simpified.

But Twilightkit, I would be more than happy to help if you wanted to PM me the difficulties you are having with the bio. I can try to explain it to the best of my abilities.

I haven't actually read through the Bio myself (lol school is so much fun >__>) But I'm going to go through it now and hopefully help point out your mistakes.

[continued in next post]

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These are problem areas and will have a commment at the end of each heading.

`Twilightkit

They call me Dayna' and I've hunted through Thirteen green-leafs. They say that I'm Daring, Sly, Smart and I'm not planning on changing anytime soon. I have read closely and I have found that the magic words are **admin edit. Many warriors live within my clan boundaries but I fight within Twilightkit, and I've been fighting along this path for 2 Years and people say I'm damn good at it.

``Image all the people, sharing for the world


nicknames:>> ... Twilight
age: >>... 2 moons
gender:>>... She Cat
alliance: >> ... Bloodclan
status:>>...single
rank:>> ... Kit
race:>>... Cat


``Imagine there's no Heaven, it's easy if you try


FAMILY: Twilightkit was found in the nursery one day, with the bloodclan scent and blood. Her real mother and father are unknown to her and others. Siblings as well. She spends her days alone, around camp or in the forest area near camp.>> ...
mother: Unknown>>...
father: Unknown>> ...
siblings: Unknown>>...
extended family: Unknown>> ...

Breezy's problem here is that, although you have given us the knowledge that Twilightkit has of her family, it would be nice for some more background info on her parents that she isn't aware of, just for us. Still, it's npt vital but it helps to bulk out your character and opens various plot possibilities for her in the future.

``You may say that I'm a dreamer but I'm not the only one


KindSilentThinkerIntelligentSly


FULL PERSONALITY: Twilightkit is quiet and silent. She is kind in ways unheard of. She normally hides instead of speaking. Because she has the sense that everyone hates her.She spends most of her days outside of camp, in the shadows, near the swamps or meadows at late evenings or at night. During the day she sleeps off the time she spent awake, or hides in the shade where its nice and cool. She is the silent type. But will speak to those, who talk to her. But can be very good at strategies in war combat, and medical assistance. All though a kit, when apprenticed she will find out her path that she chooses to help and ratin under. And do anything, to help those of her clan in need. Even sacrifice her own life. >>...


# strengths:.>>

# Shes smart and kind Intelligent. Capable of working out problems and etc etc. Use Kind/gentle/warmhearted as a different strength with details as to how this benefits her
# Can assist in medicines Does she have a good relationship with the Med-cat? Or a paticular interest in medicine? How does she have the knowledge at two moons to aid in medicine?
# Can also rip your head when angry Unusually strong? Does this have any reprecussions for her character? Is this why she is quiet, to prevent her temper from escaping?
# Strategist. Kind of the same as intelligent/smart.

I don't think it is necessary to have 5 for each of this catergories. About 3 is more suitable, Breezy.

# flaws: >>
# Can be cold hearted
# Silent She is quiet and resents the company of others? Or is just unsure of how to coomuinicate with others of her own kind?
# Will go on days without rest. Stubborn would be a suitable description, I think
# Not highly skilled in warrior skills. Doesn't understand the way they live? Or not suited to the fighting lifestyle of the warriors?

The reds in this section are suggestions to help fluff out your sections :3


# likes :.>>
# The Moon and stars Because her family could be up there? Warriors she knew and loved who have passed on because of clan feuds? What do they represent to her?
# Night air Because of it's calm nature? Still, quiet, calm, she has time alone etc etc. This can be grouped with your next 'Like'
# Night Hours
# Winter Again, why does she like winter? Cause it's pretty? (I'm being serious there btw xD)

Again, the reds in this section are suggestions to help fluff out your sections :3


# dislikes :>>
# The Sun
# Summer Heat
# Day Time
# Summer

Same goes for this as the last. Detail as to why
``No hell below us, above it's only sky


APPEARANCE : Young Black she cat kit, with blue eyes, and slender body shape. She is all though quiet, she plans out things carefully and tends to do things herself, for the idea to succeed. She also would ask others to assist, if needed. But she is only a kit right now, so she would do things herself, give suggestions or stay out of trouble.Unless if needed things were chaotic she would step up to help the issue. Her pelt being black, she camouflage, and hunt easily. Body being small, she makes little sound when moving gracefully along the grace ready to hunt, or attack with great amounts of strength. >> ...
Black>>...
Blue>> ...
(( Canadian here, so it maybe confusing if u don't know LBS)) Shes 15 lbs.>>...That is a VERY heavy cat.
Small and Slender>> ...
distinguishing marks: (( dont know what to put, but will estimate is this could be correct.)) She has birth marks on her hind paws. A Star and a Crescent Moon.>>...


``No need for greed or hunger, a brotherhood of man


FULL HISTORY: .>> ... Twilightkit is a silent individual, shes also cold and a quick thinker. She remains calm at most situations, but can be easy to anger. Her past history consisted of her being found in the clan's nursery in the middle of the night. Near twilight hour. Giving the name she has now. But also it was written on the floor from twigs beside her. She had the scent of Bloodclan. So thats how she was accepted. Other clan members were hostile or were too nice. Twilightkit despised it. She rather be treated normal that some weirdo. Shes commonly ignored, making it easy for her to sneak out at camp and she sits outside camp, waiting for her parents or siblings to show. By dawn break she heads into the nursery for brief sleep and awaits everyday near the enterance at the hour when she was dropped to this place. Its been 2 moons since the occurance. And she may wait longer or not so long now. She silently awaits her parents and apprenticeship, and what life holds for her.
I see no issue with this part of the Bio.
other : .......................>>... None


``I hope someday you'll join us, and the world will live as one
role playing sample>>
Quote:
copy and paste sample here:

Twilightkit sneaked out of the nursery, her blue eyes cascading over the surroundings of the night. The Stars were shining bright, and she stalked around the area. The Night air filling her small lungs. She prodded around until around dawn, and continued for several hours that cats were waking up at. Still not tired she went back into the nursery with prey She's too young to go off hunting by herselffrom the fresh kill pile for the queens and attempted to sleep. So not long after noisy kits bounded into the nursery disrupting her half sleeping state. She got up silently and left the nursery. It was near sunhgihg and she was dreading each moment as she walked across the rough dry ground beneath her. He paws padded across the ground until reaching soft grass outside the clan entrance. She then went to her favorite shady spot, and settled back down again, for the settle nap she was planning to take before.

This seems to be fine.

Now I swear to God, if either of you has a go at me for doing this, I will not be happy with you. I have given up all of the time I needed to post elsewheres to go through this bio as thoroughly as I did. So try to be a little grateful.

Thanks.

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No Im grateful alot. I was jsut probably getting paranoid a bout a few days ago. XD I can edit those.

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Fernstar - you did a wonderful job, and you made it a lot easier for Twi to get it; thanks;

Twilight - it's not everyone that's strict about bios, just me --> I've been roleplaying on intermediate to advanced role play sites, and I guess I'm just trying to bring everyone up and get them further in life (I'm like that: I want to help everyone do the best they can, and sometimes I'm a bit agressive about it [tough love, some call it])
Also, in my honest opinion, biographies should take a long time; this is a character that we're creating, and I want to know everything that I can about the character; so I sometimes get on member's cases and push them to improve and make a good character excellent;
It doesn't help that I have something that sorta resembles obsessive-compulsive disorder, lol;

Everyone - I've actually been working on a different style of character biography, and I think it might work a lot better. I'll post it in the staff board and let the admins take a peek to see if they like it;
edit: it's been posted; it's in the one where you have to type in a password to access;

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** Computer has decided to be a butt. Sorry, for the long reply... So I can only type out the error spots on this post, so it can be made exceptable. **

Part 1: Family:

Twilightkit`s Parents was an older medicine cat of that clan and a rogue. She was placed at the nursery at birth. And does have older siblings whom are rogues. There far from Bloodclan territory though. But her mother died, during a fight after a moon when she was born, and her litter siblings died at birth.

Part 2: Personalities: (( her age will be changed to 5 moons, if thats acceptable for her Knowledge capability.))

Knowledge: This personality allows her to be able to fix problems quickly and calmly if needed and can be very focused on her work.

Public Speaker/ Somewhat silent (( half flaw half strength)) : She can talk to large crowds, but she can be quiet too. Making her a good listener, but can have a shy half to it.

Stubborn: She wont rest from inner thoughts or guilt recieved that day making her not rest for days until she has fixed that problem absolutely and completely.

Not much in hunting skills : She doesnt understand much of the warriors half of the clans life. her abilities to hunt are very poor. She has tendencies to scare prey or just not notice them. But she does have an eye and nose to the herbs in the forest grounds.

Likes/ Dislikes`:
Stars: For her mother and siblings. She wants to wonder if they are watching her from stars in the sky.
Night: It has the calming sensation and also is nice and cool and not beating hot out.
Clouds: Adds a nice rain if warm enough making another calming sensation
Wind: Its nice and cool for a hot and humid day during GreenLeaf.

Dislikes:
Noon Hour: Hottest time of the day! Its stressful to work in the sweaty heat of the outdoors
Breeze - Less Days: Its too quiet, and leaves nothing to relax to, when its hot or cold.
Daytime: She cant see the stars so she feels alone, when she knows she cant see her family through the blue atmosphere.
Fighting: She is afraid of death. And her hunting skills do somewhat play a role in war. She also prefers to avoid violence when possible.

Weight Changed to whatever is a healthy weight. (( I do not own a cat, so I wouldnt know. Does 5 lbs sound good?))

Hunting for Prey part: Its from the Fresh kill pile from what the Warriors collected on the patrols, she never hunted for it. She just took some from the pile and took it to the sleeping queens, if u read it over and also age changed from 2 moons to 5 moons.

(( hope this fixes the issues for you Breezy and thanks Fern for the outlined guidance. ))

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-Bio Approved-

You've worked hard on this :3 Shows comittment! Now Firemaw has a friend to play with~

Btw, it's 'acceptable' not 'exceptable' ^^

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Oh lol. Minor spelling error. hahahahaha. and thank you~

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again, biography needs to be moved when accepted (v;v) *feels like the janitor, who goes and cleans up after the kids everyday at school...*

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Ololol. I forgot. Not that big a deal though >__>

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no, not that big a deal -_______-

XD