Darkkit-RiverClan Kit

[xXDarkclawXx]

A Bit About You

Your Name ∙ Kimberly Mae
Out of Character Name ∙ Wolfsongie, Kimberly, Kimmy, idc
Chatango Username ∙ Songiemuffinmaster and kimberrlymaewolfsong
Contact Information ∙ [e-mail]
Other Characters You Play ∙
Wolfsong- ShadowClan Deputy
Morningmist-ThunderClan Medicine Cat
Time Zone ∙ Central, I think?
How You Found Us ∙ SURFIN DA WEBBERZ


Introductions

Character’s Name ∙ Darkkit- Darkpaw- Darkrain
Age ∙ 5.5 moons
Gender ∙ Male
Residing ∙ RiverClan nursery
Character Type ∙ Kit

Mindset

Overall Personality ∙ Wellio, Darkkit is a kit, and he is a very quiet, calm kitten that is said to be wiser than his moons, which is 2. Darkkit is not very hyper or jumpy. He is quiet and does not play alot, he spends his time rather daydreaming or helping out with whatever his tiny body can.

Darkkit likes to listen to the elders stories often, becuase he loves learning about the past and hearing tales of the oldr clans and cats. I would say he is not a history geek, but then I would be lying to you. Darkkit loves to learn about history, and likes to be around teh elders, he thinks that they and the kits are ht ebase of the Clan, without them, the clan would be nothing.
Additional Tidbits ∙ HuGz N' mUfFiNz


Reflection

Height ∙
Overall Appearance ∙ Darkkit is a black cat with ginger spots on his chest, left haunch, and sprouting about above his eyes. His right front paw is ginger, so is the back of his head. Darkkit has bright, bright blue eyes that are usually gleaming with excitement of teh past. Some say that his eyes are a little turqiose, but, who knows.

Darkkit's head is round all the way, and a little narrower near his chin. his ears are rather big, and stand up far above his head. They are black with a little ginger on the base. Darkkit's tail is rather short, and is usually setting by his haunch or his foot as he listens to the tales of the elders.

Backstory

Family History ∙ SINCE THIS WAS OPTIONAL, ID RATHER NOT
Family ∙ Parents:
Mother-Kestrelsky
Father-Rapidwing
Birthplace ∙ RiverClan Nursery
Background ∙ Darkkit was born on a rainy day, a lone kit. his mother, Kestrelsky gave birth and then dissapeared, leaving the already depressed kit with his father, Rapidwing. Rapidwing was good for the first moon, then he to up and vanished, leaving Darkkit alone in the nursery with Peachkit, a fellow kit. Darkkit is lonely alot and likes to be alone with his thoughts.

Darkkit hasn't really had the time to exactly "live his life" or "find who he is supposed to be" I mean, two moons is two moons, and he is not very sure of his life at this moment. His mother, Kestrelsky, and his father, Rapidwing, were both very strong and hard warriors, and cared alot for their duty to the clan. THey cared for their baby well, how does one describe the care of them? They were not very concerned with his wellbeing and were in the nursery maybe every other day, leaving him a weak and helpless kit. Until Lizardtooth had her kits, then he joined her litter. Lizardtooth welcomed him and cared for him like a son. Then she passed, and he was left alone, her kits dying with her. Eventually, when he was about two moons, his parents pasted away, leaving Darkkit alone with Peachkit.


Sample

Except in the case of canon roles (such as adoption or high positions [Leader, Deputy, etc]), this section is an optional one, though if you suspect it would help to give a better idea of your character, please include it. Sample post should meet all of Cats of All Clans’ posting guidelines, and should be written as the character being registered.
DO NOT DELETE, even if you are not doing a biography sample.


Contract

By submitting this application, I am also stating that I have read, and understood, the forum rules, and that I agree to follow them. This means that I will take whatever punishments come my way should I break the rules.

--Wolfsong~Kimberly Mae~Morningmist~Darkkit

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Your application is
PENDING

I am going to really nitpick here;

1] VAGUENESS

Darkkit has bright, bright blue eyes that are usually gleaming with excitement of teh past.

Excitement of what past? I looked in the history, but I see nothing connecting this statement to his 'past.' If you were talking about the 'past' as in the stories that the elders tell, (which I rather suspect you are) then I am going to ask that you be more specific in that. In fact, I am going to ask you to go through your entire application and find ALL of the vague half-statements and what have you; the point of an application is to disclose EVERYTHING about your character, and that means that I want things to be clear, consise, and organized.

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2] PERSONALITY

We ask that members write up at least two solid paragraphs (five sentences each) on their character’s personality.

You currently have six sentences. Four more, at lest, are required. More is very much appreciated.

Keep in mind, however, that if we feel there are gaps that need to be filled in, we reserve the right to ask for more.

I also want to see several things: what are his quirks? Does he have a certain kind of speech mannerism, or does he have a habit of ducking his head when being spoken to, or what? What are his strengths, what is he good at? What are his weaknesses, what is he bad at? What does he aspire to? What does he fear?

On another note, in the age slot, he's listed as being 5.5 moons old, yet, in the personality, it says that he's 2 moons old. Please modify.

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3] APPEARANCE

This should be at least two solid paragraphs (five sentences each) in length detailing your character’s appearance (face, skin, hair, clothing, body type, etc.).

You currently have eight; two more are needed, and again, more is much appreciated.

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4] HISTORY

This section is the character’s background, and as such is mandatory. We ask that it be at least four large paragraphs – around 350 words total

Several things: ONE - you only have 132, which is less than half of what we want to see. TWO - four. large. paragraphs. You've got two. Sure, he's only five moons, but look at what I did. I made Ghostheart's whole history over 3000 words long, and it was already over 500 words long while I was well into kidhood. And don't tell me, well, that's YOU. If I can do it, then so can you. I'm the person that used to write one-liner histories and post role play posts that one or two words in it. THREE - in the age, it says that he's 5.5 moons old; in the history, it says that he's two moons old. Change, please.

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5] SPELLING/GRAMMAR
Well, a few errors and typos are okay here and there, but what I've noticed when reading this whole bio was that you have an awful lot of mistakes. I would like to ask that you use spell check more often.

There, I'm done. Not too much to deal with; just fix what I've mentioned and Darkkit should be fine =] --Breezy (p.s.) Below are some threads that will be able to help you =]

∙|Character Application Template [and requirements]
∙|Creating A Character, For Idiots (Or For Anyone Who Needs Help, Really)

[xXWolfsongXx]

now im an idiot thanks Breezy